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Postby Turiski » 2010.10.03 (04:29)

Okay, so I'm going to put on my old critic's hat and see if it still fits.


Things you did that I like/appreciate:
  • YOUR NINJAS' FEET ARE ON THE GROUND! THANK YOU! ITS NOT THAT HARD, IS IT?
  • 2-1 is well done, artistically. It's also really funny, but you did the drone's reaction well.
  • I would look very long and hard at what makes 2-4 good. It doesn't feel like something that I see often, in webcomics in general, and I think you can make something of that voice.
  • Gag-a-day comics are really cool, and I don't think we've had one with staying power since... Lenny? Am I forgetting something obvious (30-minute comics don't count)? I appreciate it and so do all the people who responded.

Things you should work on:
  • I'm not a big fan of things like 2-2.
  • You have a thing with fonts. I's okay to experiment for a little while, but eventually you need to find 2 and stick with them. For reference, right now you have 4: Papyrus for the title & number, the pixel font, the one for the ninjas and the one for the drones. Also, you had the random font for the last panel of 1-2, but it hasn't shown up anywhere else, so I'm ignoring it.
  • While we're on fonts, Papyrus really is a bad font. If you can't understand why, don't worry too much. I definitely liked it a lot before... just trust me on this one. And about the continuity of title font - meh. You're just starting. Change it at the start of one of the episodes.
  • When you do laser drones in the future, lay the laser down before the drone. That way you don't end up with the awkward art like 2-3 (I'm assuming you're using Paint. If you actually have layers, use Bring To Front instead)
  • Some would say your panel borders are too thin. I'm not really sure. Borders are one of those things that usually when you think about them they look really tacky, but their actual implementation is pretty slick.
  • Usually, it is not good to have the borders run up against the edge of the image. You shouldn't delete the borders (please God no) but just expand the grey "frame" in all directions 5-10 pixels. I'm pretty sure this will look better.


Just minor stuff, really. The concept is intriguing. With the exception of 2-2, the 2s are just superb. I'm definitely looking forward to this, and you know as well as I do that nobody cares when you update here. As long as you keep updating Uprising.

I'm watching you, Mr. I Can Totally Write Two Comics At Once :P
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Soon as in later. Probably post-December. However, aperture and I are in contact, so rest assured we are at least thinking about it.


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Postby BluePretzel » 2010.10.26 (07:27)

Kay, it's been a little while.
First off, I'd love to thank Turiski for all of the feedback. That is the shit I wanted to hear.
I've read it over a few times, and have decided I'm gonna make some of these changes. I've started off by downloading a couple of new fonts (from a site called BlamBot, mentioned in another topic), and we'll see what goes from there. I'm trying out some of the capabilities of editing through the program I use (Paint.NET, can't be screwed getting something like Photoshop untill I really need it), so hopefully effects and artwork will be a little better from now on (although you don't find much in N, lol).

So to test it out, I bring you a teaser for an N/L4D cross-over, using new fonts and image editing. It's not a proper Ncapitated comic, but I hope you enjoy anyhow.

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~By me

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~By UniverseZero

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~By Slick265

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Original sig! God this thing's old.

Also: I'm known as BluePretzel on nmaps, and BlueKraken just about everywhere else.


4 Mappacks, 1 comic:
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Ncapitated- comic by BluePretzel



<transcendence!>

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Postby Invalid » 2010.10.29 (01:02)

Arhgg ewahhhh
Absolutely disgusting ;o
A wet bumpy tongue starts wrapping around your body, then you realized that you have no clothes on.

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Postby BluePretzel » 2010.11.06 (02:08)

Okay, I've formatted almost the whole thing differently, ang give you a proper Ncapitated comic. Njoy!

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Also note: Ncapitated has a new logo which can be seen on the first post.

spoiler

~By me

Image
~By UniverseZero

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~By Slick265

Image
Original sig! God this thing's old.

Also: I'm known as BluePretzel on nmaps, and BlueKraken just about everywhere else.



4 Mappacks, 1 comic:

<CLICK>

Image

Image

Image

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Ncapitated- comic by BluePretzel





<transcendence!>

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Postby Invalid » 2010.11.11 (00:39)

wat

Best part of the comic.

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Postby BluePretzel » 2010.12.16 (00:23)

Whoo, new comic!

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It's kinda really random. Yeah. Bit rusty after so long.

spoiler

~By me

Image
~By UniverseZero

Image
~By Slick265

Image
Original sig! God this thing's old.

Also: I'm known as BluePretzel on nmaps, and BlueKraken just about everywhere else.



4 Mappacks, 1 comic:

<CLICK>

Image

Image

Image

Image

Ncapitated- comic by BluePretzel





<transcendence!>

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Postby BluePretzel » 2010.12.24 (05:33)

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Text talk has never been harder.

spoiler

~By me

Image
~By UniverseZero

Image
~By Slick265

Image
Original sig! God this thing's old.

Also: I'm known as BluePretzel on nmaps, and BlueKraken just about everywhere else.



4 Mappacks, 1 comic:

<CLICK>

Image

Image

Image

Image

Ncapitated- comic by BluePretzel





<transcendence!>

Image



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Postby BluePretzel » 2010.12.24 (23:58)

Merry Christmas everyone!!

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spoiler

~By me

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~By UniverseZero

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~By Slick265

Image
Original sig! God this thing's old.

Also: I'm known as BluePretzel on nmaps, and BlueKraken just about everywhere else.



4 Mappacks, 1 comic:

<CLICK>

Image

Image

Image

Image

Ncapitated- comic by BluePretzel





<transcendence!>

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Postby Turiski » 2010.12.25 (04:18)

Dude. Quality.
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Other Project

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Soon as in later. Probably post-December. However, aperture and I are in contact, so rest assured we are at least thinking about it.




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